请帮忙翻译胡彦斌歌曲巴黎铁塔（中译英）质量哦！

巴黎铁塔应该就是艾菲尔铁塔吧？应该是the Eiffel Tower，一般是要加the的。

I am staring on you at a corner in a cafe at Elysee street

我觉得应该是staring at吧？

all French are focus on you who is wearing a red cloth while showing the attraction casually

应该是all French' eyes are focused on ,因为focus本来就是动词，这里用被动吧。个人觉得改为all French' eyes比较好。

还有就是a red cloth，应该是a red clothes，cloth是布的意思。

整个句子这样改一下比较好。

all French' eyes are focused on you wearing a red cloth and showing attraction casually

伱觉得呢，伱先看看，我再继续改。

getting high would lose your sight

so how could you feel the romantic Paris

原句是太高，所以getting too high比较好，嗯，其实我个人翻译的话会翻译成stangding too high,应该用getting有种爬上去的感觉，这个伱自己考虑吧。

please come down and I am waiting for you there

there改为here吧。

getting high would make you die 怎么会是die是否打错的？？头晕应该是dizzy吧。

you are too more self-protection from the other这个句子好像有问题哦，保留主谓宾，就成了you are self-protection，而且用the other也不行，the other仅用于两者中剩下的那个

so how could the one who loves you approach near you 我没有见到过approach near的用法，approach 一般与to连用。

这两句一起这样译吧,too more self-protection makes the others loving you couldn't approach

love between you and me is once in a life time 这句话总觉得不通顺，说不出来为什么。

please come down because you are standing too high我觉得用you stand too high好点。

为了保持上下段对称我又重新给伱疏通了一下，请看全文。

the Eiffel Tower

you are standing on the Eiffel Tower

there is a long distance between you and me

I am staring at you at a corner in a cafe at Elysee street

all French' eyes are focused on you wearing a red cloth and showing attraction casually

stangding too high would make you fuzzy

and could't feel the romantic of Paris

too clearly after time goes by

just try to close your eyes to feel the lovely air

please come down and I am waiting for you here

getting high would make you dizzy

too more self-protection makes the others loving you couldn't approach

love between you and me is once in a life time

please value it

please come down because you stand too high

这是根据伱的做的改动，但其实都不是很好，因为伱基本上都是按照语法结构来翻译的,但是歌词其实是要求简练、形式自由，而且要求押韵，押韵现在我们一般都还做不到（这是专业人士做的努力），但是简练也比较容易做到，下面伱看我翻译的。

站在巴黎铁塔的你 Standing on the top of the Eiffel Tower

高不可攀是我们的距离 Too distant is our distance

香榭利大街的咖啡厅 In a cafe at Elysee street

一个不起眼的角落有个我专注着你 I am staring at you in an unattractive conner

法国的焦点开始转移France's fouse is change

所有的目光落在了那个红衣少女All the eyes fouse on the red clothes girl

不经意的自然魅力Casual nature attraction

发挥着她最大的威力Shows her great glamour

你站得太高 Too high you stand

会看不清 Too fuzzy your sight

巴黎的浪漫 Paris's romantic

后知后觉你才清醒Too late when you realize

试着闭着眼睛 Just try to close your eyes

去感受这浓浓气息 to feel the strong fragrance

快下来吧我等着你 Come downI'm here waiting

你站得太高 Too high you stand

就会头晕 Too dizzy you feel

自我保护的多心 Self-protection heart

爱你的人都却步难行 Too difficult the others loving you

这份缘一生一次 Only once in life

请务必要珍惜 Please value our love

快下来吧你有点高了 Come down quicklyYou stand too high

我尽量做到了押韵，但这的确很难，不过上下结构我都尽力做到了对称。歌词形式很自由，不必过于拘束于语法。比如名词的叠用、互相修饰，像Self-protection heart形式，其实在书面语中也是可以用的。

Paris: The City of Romance

The high Eiffel Tower, the colorful streets, the beautiful river Seine, the glorious palaces, the romantic people, the old history … Paris is a great place to all people in the world

As the capital of France, Paris is a modern city with a long and rich history So many events took place here and there are so many places for the visitors to have a trip

The Tower Eiffel, which is 320 meters high, is the symbol of Paris It was completed in 1889 for the centenary of the Revolution

The Arc de Triomphe was finished in 1836 It’s a world famous building, too

Old Notre-Dame attracts many foreign visitors since Victor Hugo wrote a novel named Notre-Dame de Paris

Mussee du Louvre is one of the most famous museums in the world

Enjoy yourselves in Disneyland Paris, the first Disneyland in Europe, boys and girls! Meet Mickey, fly with Dumbo and lost yourselves in wonderland

回答者：sharain - 魔法师 四级 6-19 20:16

Paris, the capital of France, lies on both banks of the Seine (塞纳河) Paris is small: it has a total area of 105 square kilometres (平方公里); but it is wonderful: Paris is a city with love, a great cuisine (烹饪), and famous architecture The city has fascinated (迷住) writers, poets, and painters Thomas Appleton (1812-84), a US author, once said, “Good Americans, when they die, go to Paris”

Known as the City of Light, Paris has been a major tourist destination for centuries The city is famous not only for the beauty of its architecture and avenues (街道), but also for its museums

Paris is divided into two parts: the Right Bank to the north and Left Bank to the south It is the heart of the French- speaking world

The Eiffel Tower is the most popular attraction in France and a landmark (标志性建筑) of the country

Two million people visited it the first year it was built, and almost 6 million people a year today

The Eiffel Tower was designed by the French engineer Alexandre Gustave Eiffel for the Paris Exposition (巴黎博览会) of 1889 People spent 2 years, 2 months and 5 days (1887 to 1889) building it It was the highest building in the world at that time

The Eiffel tower has been painted 17 times since it was built 50 tons of dark brown paint are needed to cover the tower every 7 years The names of the 72 French scientists are written on the sides of the tower

Around 400 people have fallen from the tower, mostly to kill themselves

The Arc of Triumph, is the largest triumphal (庆祝胜利的) arch (拱门) in the world

Napoleon Bonaparte (拿破仑) ordered people to build it to commemorate (纪念) his victory in 1806, but he was ousted (驱逐) before the arch was finished in I836 The Arc of Triumph is 50 meters high It can be seen from nearly every part of Paris

The Arc of Triumph is engraved (雕刻) with names of generals (将军) of French army during Napoleon's time

The Notre-Dame isn’t the largest cathedral (教堂) in the world, but it certainly is the most famous

French people started to build it in 1163 Almost 200 years later in 1345 the cathedral was finished: 130 meters long with two 69- meter-tall towers

During the French Revolution (法国大革命[1789-1799]), the cathedral was damaged (毁坏) During the 19th century it was restored (重修) by a famous architect It was restored again between 1991 and 2001

The site of the Notre-dame is the cradle (摇篮) of Paris and the religious (宗教的) center of the city

The Seine runs through the center of Paris, passing 10 of the 20 districts （区)

The river is 776 kilometers long, France’s second longest river

The Seine has always been the heart and soul of Paris The old buildings, the riverboats, the gardens, and the 32 bridges are one of the best natural scenes of the world

The oldest bridge was built in 1578 The newest one was finished in the summer of 1996

From the water, visitors can see the Cathedral of Notre-Dame, the Louvre (卢浮宫), and the Eiffel Tower The northern side of the river is called the Right Bank and the southern side the Left Bank The Banks were added to the UNESCO’s list of World Heritage Sites (联合国教科文组织的世界遗产名单) in 1991