我女儿13岁，住校初二学生，性格内向，敏感又骄傲。现在为和同学之间的关系而苦恼

Creating a Harmonious Environment

Nowadays, as many students live in the school dormitories, it is hard to avoid quarrels Last Tuesday Zhang Fang stayed up doing his homework after 10:30 pm in the dormitory Feeling tired, Li Hua went to bed immediately But he couldn’t fall asleep with lights on He got so angry that he lost his temper, complaining about Zhang’s selfishness Neither of them would give in and the quarrel continued

While they were quarreling, I tried to calm them down, saying all of us should care about others They realized their faults and made up finally

After all, we share the same school and everyone is part of the big family Whenever we face any problem, we should learn to understand and communicate with each other Only when we think more for others can we create a harmonious environment

试题分析：这是一篇提纲类书面表达，文章的要点也基本上都给出来了，但是不是很具体，考生要把要点解释清楚，不能有遗漏。除了表达这些要点以外，还要阐述自己的观点，这就要求考生自己拓展发挥，在写作的过程中，要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型，如强调句，倒装句等，让文章更上档次。同时在列举措施的时候要使用合适的连接词如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，让文章看起来很有条理，也很流畅。本篇文章在写作时不要啰嗦，力求简洁。

亮点说明所给范文语言简洁，运用了一些词组和句型： stayed up熬夜，give in 屈服，calm sb down使…冷静下来， care about关心， made up组成，After all毕竟,  Feeling tired, Li Hua went to bed immediately 这句话用了现在分词做状语，But he couldn’t fall asleep with lights on 这句话用了with复合结构，He got so angry that he lost his temper, complaining about Zhang’s selfishness 这句话用了so…that…从句和现在分词做状语， Whenever we face any problem, we should learn to understand and communicate with each other 这句话用了让步状语从句，Only when we think more for others can we create a harmonious environment 这句话用了倒装句。